It's been 4 days haha. Give it time.
I don't know any of these games, but I can give musical advice. In "Bad Apple!," you use 2 dotted quarter notes followed by a quarter note. This is basically forbidden. It's much clearer to show the third beat, so to have dotted quarter, then eighth tied to a quarter, then quarter. Makes it much easier on the reader. I would also spell the B natural that occurs throughout the piece as a Cb. This makes a Cb major chord, ergo it's function is clearer.
In "Lunar Clock", the dotted rhythm in the first measure in the treble clef is a horrible pain to read. Same guidelines as before, but you can show the quarter note division to be even clearer. The same thing with the Cb respelling. And the dotted notes in the 3/4 section. I was really hoping to hit something different with this second one haha.
I'll do the newest one from the newest game, I presume. "Ten Desires" would definitely be a challenge, but there seems to be nothing incorrect about it.
Good job on all of these! Impressive for a new arranger.